 Astarayl 2007-11-10 . chapter 1"A little hand holding" seems a little awkward syllable-wise.. perhaps "a hand to hold" would fit better?
In any case, I like the idea/message. It's a well-structured piece. |
 Doxology 2007-11-05 . chapter 1Wow. I really don't even know what to say. I'm it's so short and simple, but seems like it means so much. I adore it.
Peace and Love
~> H.P. Warble |
 smile for the sunshine 2007-11-05 . chapter 1I understand it. And I kinda like the purpose of the poem...The meaning behind it. I think that was nice. Good work. Keep writing. = ) |
 Smoky Bear 2007-11-05 . chapter 1cute. it's distant and vauge which reflects on the theme. |