It would be so incredibly poignant and depressing if you ended with "She woke up." I knew that the end was winding down to a disappoitment, and that was it--the flowery sentence afterward dulls the pain. Good piece; the rhythm is fine. Tis an interesting theme too me. The summary's frank rawness matches that of the third to last line. Good.

The last line is absolutely AMAZING. So powerful. The rhyming in the first few stanzas was well controlled, nothing badly rhymed (which is a relief, because generally I don't like rhyming poetry). I also loved the line, "the northern lights to swallow us whole". Nice job.