I definately didn't this one coming, good stuff man .

OMG you have to have a "Cat Fight". You kow what I mean old boy, oh yeah! Liked it but it was a bit short. Kdh.

This is better than the zoo with the collie in it but then again it's not hard to top that. This was way better though. I like the 'knock me out' thing, didn't see that coming. Kdh.

I have the feeling that this won't end well for our nation's captitol. I await what lies with a sense of eagerness.

Mm, you really do have a talent for creating incredible worlds and civilizations. Nice nomenclature too. Where'd you get the name 'Newn Sol' from?

Moving on...

Hey it's me, Captain Lycan from , I've read this whole story so this is a review for the whole thing. First off I'd like to say the back story is pretty cool. As a fan of mythology I approve of the references to Atlantis. Newn Sol is a cool character but victory after victory isn't the best for character development. How someone deals with defeat says more about them then how they handle winning. All in all pretty good story ^_^!

This is getting interesting...I can't wait until you update next!

Sorry for the very late reply, I don't check Vanguard too often nowadays anymore, so I noticed somewhat belatedly that you had reviewed that little abandoned story of mine...

Interesting premise, but I feel you could have done more with the beginning in particular. A little more depth could be used to describe this scenario you have created, like why are there even dragons here in the first place, why they didn't want to fight, why they did join the battle in the end etc.

Newn appears too...calm for my liking. I would expect someone in his situation to act more confused... It's not often that pretty angels visit a person, is it?

The grammar in places could also use a bit of tweaking, especially when it comes to using past and present tense.

It's a decent opening, but it could be made much better with a little more work. Also, thanks for the review on Vanguard, really appreciate it.

It's good to see Newn making friends with ancient androids. Clothing the naked too, what a humanitarian. Good job old boy. Kdh.

You have another great chapter. I like how you're re-doing this story. It's come along very good.

Well, I must say that this story gathered my attention and the prologue certainly placed my expectations high. A prologue like that seemed like a great setting for a fantasy world, but it's slightly disappointing for me this'll take place in 'our' world.
What bothered me was Newn himself (and the fact that police came to the 'crime scene' immediately... that's way too American-movie like) - all of a sudden an angel comes to him, saying he has mythical powers and gives him a sword. Less then few minutes later, without an practice, he is not only capable of using those powers according to his will (and I doubt a normal teenager would have any idea who to 'focus his magical energy') and apparently became a master swordsman, being able to cut something as small as a gun without even scratching the hand holding it and doing so while moving. IMO that's just making him overly powerful. Sure, anybody can swing a sword, but not everyone is good at it, especially not at their first try.
I'd advice you work on making the hero less perfect, coz in an action story, a good character that's unbeatable is just boring (I recall how much I hated "Bleach" for that very reason).
On a more positive note: the setting got me, so I'll probably drop by to read more in the future.
Good luck with the future chapters.

Another cool chapter old boy. I personally wouldn't want to share a home with my dead relatives but I like the angle. I would live with undead minions but that's a whole other thing. Anyway, cool. kdh.

Very good start to this story, and thank you for the review on Guilty Act. Sorry it took so long to review back, but I inevitably lost my will to do anything but hopeful this recent splurge will help me out for a bit. Anyway, I feel a bit nostalgic for Breath of Fire because of this story so I have a feeling that I am really going to love this. Guilty Act will be updated soon and I will be keeping the lookout for this.

Well I have enjoyed the story so far. I have nothing to add, except it would seem your characters seem to blush a lot and whisper words like, "why my father would've made the mountain that big." ;D
Well I liked it. Has the ring of 'epic' to it.

Nice and interesting so far, but I do have a few suggestions for you. First I'd say the idea of a guardian angel is a bit overdone, but I think it somehow fits. On the dialogue at the end of chapter 2, you could do with a litte lesson that I myself had to learn, it's that don't use verbs (ex. 'says', 'asks') one after another, ESPECIALLy when there's short words. Here's what I mean:
"What do you mean?" asked Newn.
"The boxes," said Shuigi.
"What do i do?" asked Newn.
"Destroy them," instructed Shuigi.

How you could do that better:
"What do you mean?"
"The boxes."
"What do i do?"
"Destroy them."

Also it isn't really interesting if the main character, Newn, always wins, y'know what I'm saying? It doesn't do to have him beat everythng up with his sword. Maybe have him lose a little, it'll seem more realistic to the reader. Just a suggestion.