the more i read of your stories, the more i enjoy your writing. this was beautiful and sad at the same time. i wish there was a happy ending for them but i loved what you wrote

-nods- there was a LOT of emotion in that...-sigh- it was...beautiful...

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aww so sad!
I like it alot though

Amazing! Not a lot of dialogue but the RAW EMOTION was conveyed through you words! You can't leave it there though-It is just begging to be finished!!

Really amazing!

That was a very cute story. I do request that you finish it. The emotions were so strong, I felt them. I also wanted to let you know tah tyou are very good with expressing emotions andI hope you continue doing so. :D

very fluffy and very cute

OMG! Such good writing. (: I adore it. I also just realized there were no names... (from your note). I like this love story, but I'm kinda iffy about the development of interest. How did it develop? I think you should spend more time on it and less on the angst (but the angst is good). Don't get the idea that I don't think this is awesome, because I totally do. I love the angst too; it makes this realistic. (: *adds to c2*

You still never cease to amaze me. Your writing gets better and better, yet I gave up an opportunity to write with you. What's wrong with me, you ask? You're much too cool for me, that's why.

I can see a bit of Jay Gatsby in this. His own world where nothing else matters and he cares only about the one person he truly loves. Or does he truly love her for who she is? Or for what she is. Aha. There's the question for contemplation.

Good job on this one shot. Though, I have a cool idea for you if you consider doing a second part to this one shot. You know, an entirely different one shot, but a slight continuation of this one. But people would never KNOW that it's a continuation of One Time because there are no names and you don't exactly have to specify. Eh?

I'll get back to you on that.

But excellent one-shot. Heart wrenching, angsty, everything. All the emotions of a normal human being rolled into one. I like it.

It was...i dunno...I'm happy that they finally are together and all...but i'd like to believe that he does return and they have their "happily ever after"[the romantic in me choses to believe it!!]

Hey, I really liked this.

Yea.. I had to study TGG for english last year.. funnily enough I liked it. (To the horror of my mates)

The ending has a TGG feel about it too, phsysically things are bad... he's leaving her after finally getting together with her. (in TGG Gatsby's been murdered for the faults of another) but the message is uplifting.

One time.. one moment can change a lot... and it does impact a lifetime.

Nice.