Wow! You are really good! I absolutely love this poem! Please write more!

Great imagery, especially in the first line, except it sounds like the fence is broken - is it supposed to be the fence or the window that is 'broken from wear & tear'? I love how you tied in the title to the idea of the game.

It is...I love this. Again, well written. The imagery is great. Your use of figurative language makes it wonderful. Good work.

Great imagery and description throughout the piece. The words did more than tell a story they evoked emotion. It draws you in and makes you feel what the narrator is feeling. I loved it! I would also love to know what you think of some of my stuff.