jackie
2007-11-07
ch 3, anon. | abuseits a great story with a lot of detail about the trials and tribulations of a teenage worker in suburban america. i am enjoying reading it, but if i had to come up with one criticism, it would be that its too "adult" in the term of you're writing it as a 21 year old. some separation from the 15 year old and the 21 year old could provide literary diversity to your story. but, i do really enjoy the tone you're taking with it, so its not even a personal preference so much as a professional challenge |
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