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| Almost-human 2008-02-19 ch 1,  | abuseGod dust! I almost burst out crying! |
| Ryan Schiff 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseIt is ok to have a line of poetry that is more than three words across. If a line doesn't contain a full thought, it doens't need to end. The broken up listy format of this poem takes away 90% of the meaning and emotion held in it. The metaphore about your heart being a a peice of gum made out of glass is flimsy in meaning at best and hard if not imposable to imagine. The poem ends in what can only be called a trope of the "angst" genre. The speaker ruins some realtionship only to realize the sheer apathy of the world and is overwhelmed by regret. It has been done, it has been said, it has been read. |