aw :(

i love "darling, I stole your heart and you stole mine

the clichéd ‘perfect crime’"

makes me sad

nice work. i like the last stanza. keep writing

this is beautiful poem. unfortunately i know this feeling far too well...

the fourth stanza strikes me as extrememly powerful - i wish i could find more of such beautiful poetic lines on this site. i love the pet names very much.

deanna

Very sad but so true. Din't worrymy dear, just lift that head up, who knows a kinder fellow might just be right there helping you to your feet. Who knows, just don't get too broken this time dear, I've seen you fall too many times and I can't bare to see it happen again so soon. Love ya dear.

I like the repitition of "darling" at the begining of the verses. You may want to proofread for spelling and punculation, for instance the you're in line two is actually your (unless she is a presence that is leaving your sight, which poeticly is completely posable).

There are too many ...s where the should be commas and periods and the final three lines is a weak ending to an otherwise forcefull poem. Otherwise it has the makings for a decent bit of poetry.