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| felicia13 2007-11-22 ch 1,  | abuseI like how this seems soft (interrupted for "a common bond, viscous and red"), yet doubly sharp for it. It's hard to describe... just the way your poem is. "The footprints of her lips," is quite lovely. Nice imagry throughout. Felicia. |
| Smoky Bear 2007-11-16 ch 1, | abuseabsolutely beautiful. great description and flow and the idea behind it is something quite wonderful, the perspective is amazing. very commendable. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-11-08 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I liked the line "the footprints of her lips." So clever. Very nice, elegant poem. Keep writing! :) |
| Alpha de la Omega 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseI'll never look at a mosquito the same way again. But I might still squish them. Love this poem though. Well written with a different perspective of a parasitic invasion. Good job. :) |