wow, excellent poem. Very, very good. Keep it up! "As I become your dirty prayer, a reborn sin." That's such a great line. lol
Faith

I thought this was a ver descriptive poem, very lucious, i liked it. if you got any more, lets read it !! nice work

I suppose this isn't all that bad. You painted it with style and description, but it's not got much of M material

,.-~=' "Paint a story. Write a Picture." '=~-.,_

my favorite parts are the writings in italic.
the poem is very sensual.