This was pretty good, but I do have some critizm. The second line doesn't make sense. I think it is missing a word or something. Also, this part.

Blood flowed from His pierced wounded body.

Shouting crucify Him, crucify Him

He was led to the skull and nailed to a heavy tree



You should say who is yelling curcify him. And He was led to the skull? huh?

Other than those two things, this was a great piece. I loved how you told Jesus's story. Good job!!

powerful stuff this is.
i find it really hard to write about Christian stuff...even though i DO believe.
so kudos to you and all those other christian authors out there who actually are capable of writing like this.

It is a beautiful piece but it is much to long. People here do not like to read long stories or poetry. Let your talents show through a shorter version. Looking forward to reading more.

Beautiful work, Ninja. Keep up the great work. God Bless you.

I love it. Good depiction although it jumps around a little, which made it a little difficult for me to follow but maybe it's just me :p. Keep up the good work.

~Jeannie-Redd