| Reviews for You Can't Love Me |
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jacksy 11/19/07 . chapter 3hey, just by chance looked at your story and I'm glad I did! I don't usually read stories that have religion as a major role within the story, not being religious myself, but by yours I am pleasantly suprised, I really like your writing style, and the fact that you show the story from the non-religious,however your main character did admit believing in god, but not neccessarily adhering to the expected lifestyle, is good too (sorry went on a tangent there lol) I think the religious quality to this story definately makes it different and worth reading! Youcan understand Steven's trouble with liking Heather, and although at some points I felt he was very narrow minded, such as with the cinema, and his internal thoughts regarding dating Heather, I till felt him to be a very likable character. Heather also comes across as very genuine despite her lifestyle choice, and I am interested to see where this story will go. I realise I am reviewing on the third chapter, but my computer is being funny with what its letting me read and review on tonight! But great work, sorry that I rambled! Jacksy |
dreamtaker 11/18/07 . chapter 5omg, haha. whoops! nice chappie. ;) |
dreamtaker 11/18/07 . chapter 4Great chapter, funny too. ) Loved everything. |
hanahan 11/15/07 . chapter 3wow it's pretty long and what's going to happen when dhe asked him to ride with her? |
Klyne 11/14/07 . chapter 3Please post the next chapter soon! The wait is killing me! |
under the influence 11/13/07 . chapter 3I have to be honest...Steven kind of bugged me here...but once he stopped being 'preachy' (as you call it)...I found him kind of endearing. I will be awaiting the next chapter :) |
under the influence 11/12/07 . chapter 2Heather didn't confuse me at all...I think the Holy Spirit is working on her...making her ask if this lifestyle is everything she really wants... |
under the influence 11/12/07 . chapter 1good start...Stephanie reminds me of Penny's little girl... |
dreamtaker 11/9/07 . chapter 3wow, i thought she was going to hide this until a better time. But anyway, thumbs , can't wait to keep reading. Update soon! |
dreamtaker 11/9/07 . chapter 2awesome. |
dreamtaker 11/9/07 . chapter 1Hello! This story grabs my attention. thumbs up for this chapter! |
FrankCastleCM09 11/9/07 . chapter 3I was right. Not perfect. Liked seeing his POW. Steven and Heather do seem good together already and you always gotta love that tension :) Hope you update soon. |
Half-blood-heritage 11/9/07 . chapter 3I really like this, I love the comparison between Steven and Heather; he seems so young compared to her! Well, I hope you continue with this, it's really good. |
FrankCastleCM09 11/9/07 . chapter 2Hm, a different side of her. Regardless, I still think she seems pretty sweet and nice. I look forward to seeing where this is going. I also get the feeling that people will find out about her down the road (her sister, steven, etc). Look forward to more :) |
FrankCastleCM09 11/9/07 . chapter 1You've got a great start thus far. It's only the first chapter alone and already your characters are very likeably and authentic. Even though she's a prostitute, I do like Heather. Regardless, she seems very sweet and honest. You do a particularly great job of describing her and really putting us inside her head. I like her chemistry with Stpehanie. As for Steven, he does seem nice so far but it being one of your stories, I'm guessing there's something with him. He's not entirely perfect. I look forward to reading more :) |