My only edit is this line:
"A dimple appeared on his left cheek and I fought back to not poke him in his cheek. "
I think it seems redundant to say "cheek" twice, and the second half of the sentence *to me when I read it aloud* seems kind of awkward. Maybe "...and I fought back the urge to poke it."?

Anyways...
Wow. Talk about a quick move. Since I'm reading "New Moon" right now, it kinda reminds me of the "sudden, quick move" the Cullens made to LA with no warning. d:P Great job, though. I can't wait to read more on what happens in this new quaint little town d:D

Update, Mel. d:P

Plot sounds pretty good. By "were," I can only assume that it's...werewolf? But what the heck could a "vee" be? I prefer shorter stories. Just so you know :D.

- Mr. J

Um never post the plot, write it out.