The synaesthesia in the second line just blows you away. This is beautiful - tiny, raw, perfectly formed. The way you've set it out: two lines, then a fat stanza, then a final, poignant line is breathtakingly simple yet effective. My favourite line is 'scraping lazy circles of doubt across my back'; it's so poetic. Take care of yourself.

"my shadow smells like winter"
That line is beyond brilliant.

this is one of the best things I've ever seen out of you. woww. 'my shadow smells like winter' -- ahh I am floored. so beautiful.

Wow, you know what's funny. I've read one great, WONDERFUL poem by you, and now I'm absolutely hooked. You are definitely on my favorite author's list now. I love the line "dust falls from my skin like summer rain". It's amazing the beautiful metaphors you have.

i'm in love with the first two lines.

beautifully morbid.

and i can almost feel the fingers "coarse and dry" across my cheek.

i'm sorry. but this is soso beautiful. i think it's the best thing i've seen from you in a while. maybe it's the length, but it just - hits & never stops. "my shadow smells like winter" - mygod. i love this. but i am sorry you have to feel it. hope you're taking care of yourself.