at last! finally! ive been waiting for this a long time lol
i thought ud given up
i had to reread the first story again so has to remember the key points
another evil cliff-hanger
are kistrelle and fane romantically involved now?
anywho i expect an update quicker than last time

hello i'm sure u don't remember me i had emailed u a while ago about the ending. I am glad u are continuing the story as many writers on this site stop half way trough and pretty much say screw it. Id have to say this is a great first chapter. Its enticicing and captivating just at the beginning and i can't for the next one

o, glad you put this up, its a really gd intro, sets it up amazingly, looks like Bos. is being ruled by his emotions a bit to much but happy to see him beat the humans.
Wilko x

Thanks for the review!

I must confess not to have known that particular fact. Or I was confused on the matter. So I guess by saying my "writing skills" need an upgrade, you mean my overall grammer? Yeah, I can accept that. I'm not what you might call schooled in the subject of creative writing, I'm almost entirely self taught.

Still, the great part about my grammer being the main thing I need to work on is that my editor can fix all that, and I can concentrate on my ideas and my "art".

Writing is divided into art/idea/concept and the skills necessary to put that idea into English. Your art is grand, your ideas are interesting. Your writing skills need an upgrade.
These are examples of sentence fragments:
'One of the guards on patrol said to another.'
'The man responded, lighting a pipe of locally grown herbs.' I think you meant these fragments to be part of a dialogue attribution sentence.

The standard form for a dialogue attribution sentence is: "Come, Spot," said Jane. It is not: "Come, Spot." Said Jane.
It works the other way, too: Spot said, "Come, Jane." -- Not: Spot said. "Come, Jane."
What's interesting that you get it right sometimes -- 'He shrugged a reply, "Between you and me, I heard he wasn't even human."'
Most frequently, however, you have dialogue and sentence fragments: ‘Yeah, it was just a skirmish!’ The first confirmed. ‘So how did he survive?’ A second man said, glancing casually into the open camp-fire.