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| The Postscript 2007-11-10 ch 1,  | abuseI have to admit the last line threw me off a bit. Your diction earlier in the poem pointed to something more closed-in than a blanket, and I was thinkinng of a box, etc. And I think that a blanket isn't really a good conclusion considering the natural development. Remember, especially in a short poem, that everything needs to help point to this climax. However, that is just my personal interpretation that I can only hope you at least consider. Keep writing, k. |