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| Andrea Roycee 2007-11-22 ch 1, | abuseI like this one too, its subtle and its like where is this going and then it gets to the end and its like whoa. I also like how you dialogue its really good. |
| Let Them Eat Cake 2007-11-18 ch 1, | abuseO. Interesting. I enjoyed this a lot. I actually think that if you wanted to, you could continue this, but that's up to you. Just saying you could make a good story out of it. One little thing: her name changed from Jane to Jean, but I think that was just a little type-o. Great job! It was really enjoyable! - Kay (Let Them Eat Cake) |
| Tasha Lee 2007-11-11 ch 1, | abuseGreat idea. You write really well, too. Grammar's in check, unlike most other stories. It'd be great if you wrote more on this. :D |
| poncypuck 2007-11-11 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed this. You did a great narration. The conflict of the paparazzo was especially interesting. The abrupt ending was a nice way to conclude the story, I think it worked well with the overall tone. Nice work! |