How did you fit that much story into such few words? Well written. I liked the tone of the story also!

thats really cool. I love how he was lying to her.

This was beautifully written. Not many people can pull off this kind of voice, but I thought you handled it really well. I'm not the best critic, but I enjoyed it. It read a little like Clive Barker meets Poe. That was my impression anyway.