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| simpleplan13 2008-02-14 ch 1,  | abuseI like the middle a lot.. its a really powerful image.. Im not a big fan of the second and second to last line.. the phrase "fake jolly" seems odd and sort of like its just there to rhyme with melancholy... other than that I really liked the piece a lot Thanks for your review... definitely picked an old piece to review.. lol... I think my newer stuff is a lot better if you wanna check it out |
| poemkitten7 2007-12-06 ch 1, | abuseI like the rhythm and your word choice. Very original. Keep up the good work! :) -Sara |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseExcellent sound and progression. The repetition works well to frame the flow. Song-like. Very audible. Good work. MD:77. |