Wonderful story! You really did an amazing job and I can`t wait to read more.

ok you explained that blue is a girl but your writng still needs consistency and could be ordered a little better and you mis-spell later a lot you have been using the word latter which doesnt get used much in everyday english

you have a serious issue with consistancy you keep jumping around from male to female and do not seem to be able to make your mind up is blue male or female. besides this a good chapter however in these encounters you could go into more detail and add more emotion as some of the characters emotions are displayed very basically

ok you need to go over this one because ranna was sold chapters back aly is riding star but besides that a good chapter. please work to keep things more consistent thankyou

nice chapter the story is coming along well cant wait to read the rest

you asked for an opinion so here it is aly is portrayed well as is wolf however charles and sadin at this point cannot be judged as little characted development has occurred i assume this happens later in the story. again another great chapter and a compeling read

wow im definitely liking the story so far but you really should go over it and correct the errors, the story is still very good and the errors dont impact the read too much but still if younger people were to read it, it may confuse some of them.

hm
curious as to what comes next
update soon plz
wish you the best of luck

i have to admit im slightly unsure why you jump from third to first person and back again and this section 'some of them making her stomach flip but enticing all the , Weavers,' doesnt quite make sense it seems like something is missing or the comma shouldnt be there. despite this it is a good chapter

like the chapter the epilogue could have been separate and you need to check because you but a he instead of she but besides that good. looking forward to the rest

Aly sorted out the sentence and replied firmly, determined to keep up with the Sphinx. “I return to you a book which was never mine and always yours, which I never stole but you never managed to keep. In return for returning you a Book I am asking a favour in a war that is neither mine nor your problem and not of our making but certainly of our consequence. I do not associate with the Elementals yet I am not human, I am both yet neither.”

OH MY GOD, THAT WAS SO AWESOME! As I read this little speech I was in awe. I only wish I could think up something like that to write (I won't even bother trying to wish that I could say it, I am so not quick enough :P ). This was an awesome chapter, and I can't wait to see what drama you have in store for us in the next chapter. Keep up the fantastically awesome updates!

Oh.My.God. I love this story. I just pulled an all nighter to get to this chapter! Ah! The only thing I want to say before I get some well deserved sleep at 6:11 in the morning is that I hope you update soon! Please Please Please grace us with another chapter ASAP!

I love it already. It's a real eye catcher. Can't wait to read more.

i liked this chap =)
cant wait for more!

I don't know what to say... Just wow I guess. This chapter was really umm I have no idea how to explain it. It was just awesome ^^ Update soon