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Aquafied 2007-12-30 . chapter 1
loneliness always feels like a fileting rip to me.
review 2007-12-15 . chapter 1
yeah this is really sad.
i like the "& i could feel (almost)" part.
simpleplan13 2007-11-23 . chapter 1
I like this a lot... the title is great and I like the line about the invisible barrier and the part in quotes.. great piece
Miz E. Mak 2007-11-16 . chapter 1
depressingly, beautiful.
it's like a sad photograph.
write on.
smile for the sunshine 2007-11-16 . chapter 1
Aw, that was so sad. But I thought that, again, it was well written. Good work. = )
The Postscript 2007-11-12 . chapter 1
Nice! There were many little components of the poem that I just adored. For one, the use of the word "tug". It is such an acurate word for this piece! Good job with diction in other places as well. I also really love the lines "i'll be following/the rise and fall of our feelings/to the very end". Really great write that tugs on my own heart as well. Keep writing, k.
marinawings 2007-11-12 . chapter 1
wow. chills. this one definitely gave me chills. there's a pleasant, haunting cadence to it that lends atmosphere. i can definitely feel the emotions this poem conveys. good work!
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