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Luna Turner 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abuseOh my! First off- the dialect is amazing! You do a wonderful job keeping consistent with the time period! You must read a lot of Jane Austen and other classics! It makes me jealous how consistent you are, really. I write off of what I THINK they talked like, not what I know. It's kind of sad really. Your prologue was a good length, not too long, not too short. Your grammar was practically perfect which is a pet peeve of mine, so that's like heaven. My only crticism would be to make your paragraphs smaller. I understand because I had the same exact problem awhile ago. It's a hard habit to break, but you just need to space them out. Don't be angry if I give you criticism, because I know it might sound weird because you're more experienced then me, but it's the best I can do to help. ~Luna Turner
luciiee.x 2008-05-14 ch 9,	abuseAhh. Such a lovely little chapter. Yes, well done.
Gabby 2008-05-13 ch 9, anon.	abuseah...witty and flirtatious banter. I love it of course. And enjoyed it a lot. It flowed well and gave some background into their characters while still letting them feel each other out. Very well written.
Clarelouise 2008-05-13 ch 8,	abuseI really like the way elisabeth helps josie here, and how josie can't stop asking for help, it shows the reader how scared she is and in so much pain. just one thing - 'speak through the contractions, pulling on Elisabeth’s arm for a safe haven from the contractions.' - i just think maybe you could find another way of saying it so you dont repeat 'contractions'? but apart from that its very well written and at the end the reader is left wondering what wil happen next. hope she's ok!
Gabby 2008-05-11 ch 7, anon.	abuseMaster Hensley...I'm in love already! haha. This Master Hensley seems very well speeched, but I guess we shall see more into his character in future chapters. Loved this one though. I think I was about to scream with Elizabeth when she saw him in that corner. I'll be patiently waiting for their next meeting.
luciiee.x 2008-05-11 ch 7,	abuseGosh. Two updates already. I would have read earlier, but it seem I have come down with a cold of some sort. It's about time Elisabeth met a man.. to her liking. Great story.
Clarelouise 2008-05-10 ch 6,	abuseyou really managed to describe the bal well here, without long paragraphs that i never seem to be able to get away from! i found it so easy to get into the story and imagine the characters. i especially liked 'I was merely tired so I rested on his chest merely to breathe while the musicians took a short break'. the way they try and keep up their reputations is very funny. very very good!
Clarelouise 2008-05-05 ch 5,	abuseyay ur finally continuing! i love the descriptive language, this is so beautifully written! i can just imagine the characters just like ones from a jane austen novel. i particularly like the way u describe the smell of the roses - 'the scent melting in the air like sugar dissolving with cinnamon over a low fire.' such an original and well written description! please continue with it :)
luciiee.x 2008-05-05 ch 5,	abuseThat was a quick add. Very good though.
luciiee.x 2008-05-03 ch 4,	abuseOnce again, an amazing chapter from an amazing author. It's just a shame at the amount of time there is between each chapter.
Maturin 2008-04-08 ch 3,	abuseThis is a really good story, I love your writing style. Libby is a very interesting character, and I like the way that you managed to give us just enough insight into her relationships with Ackley and Alice, but didn't spend too much time on it or drag it out. (By the way, Ackley is a great name.) The language you use really gives the story a strong sense of time and setting - it's as if you had written it in the early 1800's! The only criticism I have is that maybe you could have revealed a bit more of the overall plot in these chapters. Looking forward to more!
luciiee.x 2008-03-23 ch 3,	abuseThis fiction is bloody amazing. I don't know how you do it. It's like reading a Jane Austin novel.. really! More when you can.
Clarelouise 2008-01-06 ch 3,	abuseYou have certainly got lots of experience in writing in this style! the vocabulary and way you phrase sentences really give this story the feeling that it is a genuine insight into the life of someone living in the early 19th century. just one small thing - you wrote 'while pulling a gray dress made of lightweight cotton dyed gray' and I just thought it would flow better if you didn't repeat 'grey'. overall a good read though, well done!
Prieda Solo 2007-12-13 ch 2,	abuseI love Elizabeth and her talking to herself! (see, it is normal.) Such a lovely character, it will be very interesting to see how this progresses, I feel it has a lot of potential :)
Prieda Solo 2007-12-13 ch 1,	abuselovely. Very nicely described, and I like your characters already. You manage the language nicely too, managing to get enough of the regency era in there, without making it too hard to understand. I am thinking of making a c2 for regency fics. Would you mind if I included this? Prieda =D

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