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| diffident 2008-01-20 ch 1,  | abuseThe last stanza seems like it's cut off very abruptly at the end of each line.. but it seems intentional. Kind of like a shattered edge of glass is abrupt. marie |
| riotmaker 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abusei. **. love. it. gorgeous . simple . |
| simpleplan13 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseshort, but insanely sad... great piece |
| a silenced revolution 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseLike other reviewers said, I think this is easily relatable for many people. These haiku really capture the emotion. |
| VIOLENTLYmistaken 2007-12-14 ch 1, | abuseinteresting. I like how you titled it "Josie" and then offered no explanation. Or perhaps it's an allusion to something that I missed? oh well, I just like the vagueness of it, and how you seem to trail off on some of the lines, as if you're leaving the thoughts unfinished. and once again THANK YOU for the reviews. They're so uplifting since I feel like such crap about my writing lately:D |
| Symphany is lyrical bliss 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abuseIntense. I think this is something most people could easily relate to. Great use of haiku. I personally always have a difficult time writing them and admire anyone who can use them effectively. It's probably just cause you're awesome. am i right? im right. haha ily |
| girl without wings 2007-11-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is a portrait of many people, I think. You did a nice job capturing emotions in this piece. Keep up the good work! |
| kelsi bones 2007-11-12 ch 1, | abuseI really like haiku poetry, and this piece is no exception. There's a lot of emotion in it, and it's so real. I also like the way you used two verses instead of just one. k.X |