Reviews for A Small Mustard Seed

Reviews For: A Small Mustard Seed

girl.in.love 2008-05-25 ch 1,	abuseThe descriptive language in this chapter is amazing!
kimono3kitty 2008-05-24 ch 1,	abuseThis was a lovely chapter. I liked how you introduced the characters and the setting. It was put into a situation that was perfectly natural and that helped the transitions flow smoothly. I'm looking forward to future updates. ~K3k
Dot Cubed 2008-05-23 ch 1,	abuseFor the RG! :D Aw, this was sweet! I thought you had absolutely amazing description in it; like I could really see the situations. I also felt that your story was very realistic. It's not some drawn out plot with major plot twists, it's a progression that's very simple and I love it. I think my only problem with it is the religious aspects, but that's simply a personal preference. Also, I noticed a few grammar mistakes (you put "rowing" when I'm sure it should be "growing", but that's just human error.)
Mad for Figs 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseI'm actually non-religious, so I suppose this piece didn't have as much of an impact on me as it should have. But nonetheless, it was very inspiring and proves a lot about human nature. Again, I liked your style and the plot. The progression in time was smooth, though the jump from the porch to her, I guess bachelorette party?, was a bit sudden. Maybe I just missed something. But again, grammar is very well done. Keep it up.
Kaiyako Kagami 2008-01-29 ch 1,	abuseHey! Terrific first chapter to your story, it's very interesting and I liked how well you described Natalie, without really describing her. I mean I like the flash back part because you didn't just go Natalie was a insecure kind of person, you showed how she would react in situations. To be perfectly honest I don't have much an eye for grammar, so the only mistake I saw was: “Well, if I would you I’d stop reminiscing and begin to think about that aisle you’ll be walking down tomorrow.” 'would' should be were. Thanks for the review by the way, I look forward to your future chapters. Kaiyako K.
Unbeknownst 2008-01-26 ch 1,	abuseNot my favourite genre, but your characterization was quite strong, and your dialog was good. My only quibble would be with your grammar--there are a few errors, here and there (such as mixing up your and you're) that detract from the overall quality of the story.
Dexterity 2008-01-24 ch 1,	abuseHi, fellow writer of reviewers-found! It feels nice to see other reviewers-found members on fictionpress and review them even though it isn't their turn. Either way, nice story there. Your writing is really up there in the high levels and I don't see much that you really need to work on. The spelling, grammar, and general flow and pace of story is top notch. The only complaint that I have is regarding the plot, but honestly, it is personal opinion so I think I won't state it here as it might sound too offending. It isn't about the religious aspect of the story (since I too am a believer, though not a very good one I admit), but the military aspect. If you really want my opinion, feel free to pm me. Anyway, that's all I have to say. Thanks for the nice story! If you have time, take a look at my story 'Willing Tool' which is in an experimental stage so I need quite a bit of feedback before I could develop a good style for that type of story. Either way, good luck writing! Looking forward to your turn on reviewers-found!
Joanna Johnson 2008-01-13 ch 1,	abuseNice Story there. I like the plot n all, but I got a little confizzled when she was reminising and when the present was occuring, but other than that it was great! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Britte Starr 2007-11-19 ch 1,	abuseYou are a really good writer, how old are you? You have to be at least like 20 something. This is really really good. Update soon please.
No Idea Why I Smile 2007-11-13 ch 1,	abuseI like it so far...does need editing, and youre being evil and not letting me edit, but looks good...lemme know wehn its edited and posted, and ill read it again!
C.F. Anne 2007-11-13 ch 1,	abuseAww...this was really great. (: I love all the vivid descriptions and it flowed very nicely. The only thing I could suggest would be to give hints of the proposal, make the atmosphere more romantic, etc. When he proposed, it was kind of an abrupt change. But you honestly did a marvelous job...and I saw that you got another review! ek! Keep on writing! It's a beautiful start!!
Lana Dee 2007-11-12 ch 1,	abuseGood. I loved the intro but it jumped back into the past to fast - I was just getting into the swing and the starry night and the feel of the cold air. It was so good that I watnted it to continue for a while longer. Good detail. I would like to see it cover a little less ground and the ground that it does cover, I'd like to see in more depth. Keep up the great work Great American Author!

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