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| KnittingKneedle 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abusestylistically, wow totally original and totaly awesomme! You pack a lot of emotion into the sentances and I really enjoyed it. The definitions were great, and I like your use of reccuring themes...the subject matter was not wholly original but the way you tackled it should be applauded. Sometimes it's a little jumpy with the changes, I would have preferred a smoother read at times. But apart from that, brava, I really enjoyed this. Keep writing! |
| Leaves of Labefaction 2008-02-07 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is really good, with a lot of emotion. There is sadness, and humor. I don't really like the romantic part, but you know, that is just me. It is a bit choppy, but that helps with the style, except with the part about Ellie being pregnant and the part about Fee. Those parts are a bit too short and choppy, so you don't really get the emotion right. But I really the story! Great job! |
| Andromede 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseIts hard to find stories of hope with happy endings anymore. At least in the way you wrote it. Loved this. Keep it up! |