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| S. Ben Beach 2007-12-13 ch 1, | abusewow, great work, love the rhymes thrown in at all sorts of places, gives it a bumpy feeling (sorry for a lack of a better term). Love the gradual metamorphosis from the doormat to the goddess, and then linking it all back to the quote at the end. |
| fairytale failure 2007-11-14 ch 1, | abuseI love this - you have a great way of using rhymes, thrown haphazardly into your poem. It sounds a little like slam. The last line was great, a very confident final thought and tying back to the quote at the beginning. |