Reviews for Dante's brother's a little bastard

Reviews For: Dante's brother's a little bastard

Pinkamoo 2008-05-23 ch 10,	abuseWainwright. My best friend from year five's last name, she was such a funny girl. This isn't a really long chapter, mine considering. I like the star/sun things, how do you do them? Wonder what Miss Jess is going to do about this. Well, considering Dante's brother is in the title of the story - he must play a major part in it, so you have to make something happen. Either that, or you change the story title. You could make him cheat on Vi, and therefore result to a falling out with Jess and Dante "If your brother can't be trusted, how can you?" (which will be resolved, of course, at stories end) and this could also help give your story some plot since you are always complaining (or rather, telling me so) that you don't know where they are going. If I think of anything else, I'll tell you.
Pinkamoo 2008-05-23 ch 9,	abuse"Race you to the shower!" nice one, Morgan. I applaud you. Really, I do. I have many ideas now for said title, doesn't mean you have to agree with them, but anyway. Kiddo is 'kiddo' and not 'kido'. Oh, she's having Dante's babies. Sweet.
Pinkamoo 2008-05-23 ch 8,	abuseI realised my mistake in calling THAT risque, considering some of mine are just as so. But still, I liked saying it. Risque. I like that word. If someone started talking to me about that stuff, well...I'd run, just run. You did a good job with the guys point of view, it's hard doing that. Good chap.
Pinkamoo 2008-05-23 ch 7,	abuseDude, 'put' not 'putt'. Risque, Morgan, risque. Cute chapter, I am thinking of ideas as to your story title trouble, but won't mention them till I have read the rest. Good chapter, MJ.
GrannyP 2008-04-26 ch 10,	abuseYour choice about the tattoo. Does it make a difference to the story-line in anyway? As in, does the location of the tattoo have any significance to events of the story? If it does, then change it to whatever it needs to be. If it doesn't, then it won't really matter. Making up your own little pathology world is always fun. I am currently making up my own history and language for my current story. It's nice to be completely in charge of the reality of the world. Nice update.
GRAYTEXT 2008-04-26 ch 10,	abuseGood chapter. I've also never seen a pathology notice, but I don't think they would be that personal. I don't see anything wrong with keeping the tatt on her stomach. It would be funny to see it stretched.
GrannyP 2008-04-12 ch 9,	abuseHa! Guess I spoke to soon with that last review! Either way, it was still funny. Oh, and all the bits where the twins talk to each other in their heads is great... definitely taking that psychic twin thing to the next level.
GrannyP 2008-04-12 ch 8,	abuseHA! I love how Jess made his dad think that she's pregnant when she doesn't even know herself and she just now thought of that. Classic! Wait, I should probably see where this is going to go.
GrannyP 2008-04-12 ch 6,	abuseI can't understand why this has me cracking up so much. I am very sleep, first of all. But I just keep giggling. I like how you leave the little endings kind of cliffy. Sometimes they throw me off, like it's an author's note or something. But I am just weird like that.
GrannyP 2008-04-12 ch 3,	abuseOkay, this is really funny to me. I can definitely see why it's in the humor category. The use of language is hilarious.. you definitely have a way with words.
GRAYTEXT 2008-04-12 ch 9,	abuseThanks for updating. Fortunately being a teenager and pregnant isn't what it used to be. She'll have a lot more opportunities than if it were say 1950. Plus, she could always give it up for adoption. I'm interested to see what she decides to do.
GRAYTEXT 2008-01-20 ch 6,	abuseI'm curious about Uncle Sam. I'll stay tuned.
GRAYTEXT 2007-12-09 ch 5,	abuseThe mother must be cool to laugh at Jess' phone conversation. I was confused about the setting of this chapter. I didn't realize they were back at Dante's house until the end of the chapter. Why were they invited? How much do Dante's parents know?
GRAYTEXT 2007-11-23 ch 3,	abuseI'm slightly confused. What did Uncle Sam have waiting for them? Wouldn't that have happened before class the next day? I like that she at least listen is two subjects. Keep it up.
GRAYTEXT 2007-11-15 ch 2,	abuseNo, I probably won't guess. Please continue.

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