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wishing.on.echoes 2007-11-27 . chapter 1
You need more punctuation and you need to watch your verb tenses and whether they should be singular or plural.

I really like the subject, it's written very well and it's different from a lot of things I've read, but I am by no means an expert.

ciao
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