I had to evacuate as well...I couldn't breathe the entire night. Only thing is, I had to leave a LOT earlier than you did. When I woke up, I could see the flames down in a valley.

Good use of the enjambment in this--you quicken the pace of the poem, which is what I'm sure the general feeling was meant to be. What I wasn't so sure of was the "Oh It's just the sun"...the addition of those words sort of dilute the panicked feeling. If you're trying to introduce relief/hope, it's not really fitting.

Aw, this is so sad but I loved it. This was incredibly well written. Not too big a fan of the formatting but I think that the content (words) were loverly. Good work. Keep writing. Sorry you had to face that tragedy. = (