|Reviews for Strays|
| Iheartmyipod 10/2/12 . chapter 1
Wow! Nice story!
| LaughsWithTears 1/23/11 . chapter 1
... Wow. Just... Wow. There are no other words for how good this story is.
| arix 5/17/08 . chapter 1
I love your stories!
| heartfeltlove 11/18/07 . chapter 1
I like it.I really really like 's very intresting,and origanal most people have the woman as the begger or damsil in distress but I love how you switched you going to write more to it?
| gibbs 11/16/07 . chapter 1
odd, but cute. is that even possible? i like it!
| asdfasdfasdfasdfasdfasdfasdfas 11/15/07 . chapter 1
:D wow this is interesting. mind elaborating on what verse narrative is? is it a structure [to write], or is it a genre?
i liked the story plot - it's something which was rather interesting to experiment with [which you did a good attempt on]. however, frankly, i didn't like the choppiness of the piece, especially in the beginning, because you broke up a lot of sentences and made them in to paragraphs. i like to vary my sentence length when i write - long, short, middle, and so on. i'd give you an example of what i mean by that choppy feeling [as in, how i read it out in my head]:
HE woke up in a foreign bed.
IN a foreign room
IN a foreign life.
THE ROOF was cream coloured.
IT WAS pure looking and...
yeah. you get the drift.
basically the whole story's okay, it's just that i felt the breaks made it choppy. :D keep it up!