Reviews for cartoons of yesterday

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Faith Adeline 2008-01-03 ch 21,	abusewow, the last two were really strong. I love the last two sentences of this one. It really closed the collection on a good note. Very, very strong. I loved it, and I cannot wait for more from you :) Faith Wonderful work.
suicide girls and death boy... 2007-12-20 ch 3,	abusegod, this is beautiful really, i love it the imagery is amazing
Faith Adeline 2007-12-14 ch 19,	abuseI am so surprised more people don't read this. Amazing piece, I loved it. I don't know if you meant to be all underlined though, and there was http:lli225 in front of the title, so you may want to go edit that out. Other than that, this piece was very, very good. I loved it! Keep up the amazing work and update soon :) Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-12-08 ch 18,	abuseamazing, as usual. I can't wait to read your story! The title sounds cool! I loved this update, and I cannot wait for more. Keep writing for this collection, these pieces are wonderful. Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-12-02 ch 17,	abuseI simply adore the last two lines. They were an amazing way to end the poem. I loved this, it's so good and so full of emotion. Keep it up, and update soon. Faith
LaTragique 2007-11-28 ch 5,	abuseI thought that this would be a good place to leave a review (and return the favor) since you kind of left one of your own in this chapter. I really like this collection of prose. It reads like poetry.
Faith Adeline 2007-11-28 ch 16,	abuseWow, wonderful additions to this collection! Both are very good poems, keep up the great work and update soon!! Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-11-24 ch 14,	abuseVery, very good. I loved the last small paragraph. There were a couple small errors, such as no period after, " . . . it's another way for me to survive. I dread. . ." You forgot to put that little period in. Also, you said, " . . . the one I live behind," shouldn't that be leave? Those are the only things I could see. I like your new word also. Update soon! Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-11-21 ch 13,	abusewow, very good post. I like it. Although, I would change one of the bleeding's, to something else. Just because it's a little redundant. Find another word that will give us the same image, is my suggestion. Keep up the good work. Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-11-19 ch 12,	abuseI love when you update this, haha. Great job, as usual. I haven't read one that I haven't liked yet. Keep up the wonderful work, and just letting you know, I'll be updating my collection soon. Update soon, I can't wait for more :) Faith
Faith Adeline 2007-11-19 ch 10,	abuseexcellent job as always. I cannot wait for more :) Faith
Blackbird-chan 2007-11-19 ch 5,	abusewow. These were really, really intense. I haven't read all of them yet because I'm still trying to process the five I have. These all came with beautiful imagery and I was able to connect with them. I love the way they are all a little disconnected and leaves the reader to make their own conclusions. The only recommendation I would make is to beware of getting too dramatic otherwise it could border on whiny. Overall amazing job.
Faith Adeline 2007-11-18 ch 8,	abuseWow, these last chapters were very good. Your writing is very mature, and I love that you use challenging words. It just makes the prose much more enjoyable for me. You are a very good writer, keep it up, I love this collection.
Faith Adeline 2007-11-17 ch 4,	abuseThese are really good pieces. While you may be posting them as seperate to one another, they do mesh together in some ways. And yeah, there are some parts that can be said differently, to help the flow of the prose, but overall these are really good. Keep it up! Faith
squiggle-line 2007-11-17 ch 2,	abuseIs this connected to the first piece? I'm not sure who the narrator is speaking to. Why is she "the girl with resentment churning behind her eyes, [] always crying when [] alone, curled up in a ball of disaster" ? The plot in this drabble is not as clear to me as it is in the first one. "The way I crave the alcohol [too?] and take away..." Again, there are some phrases that could be trimmed down to flow better. I think the rhymes (lips/grips/hips and heal/feel/real) are a bit jarring too. But overall, still very poetic. I like this one a lot too.

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