Reviews for At the End of the River

Reviews For: At the End of the River

CornerChild 2008-02-07 ch 5,	abuseGood story
A Healing Heart 2008-01-29 ch 9,	abuseAnother good one. Keep it up! -Flare
A Healing Heart 2008-01-18 ch 8,	abuseGood work. As always, I enjoyed your work. Keep it up. And I love the language. Hee hee. -Flare
A Healing Heart 2008-01-16 ch 7,	abuseThanks for the special thanks. I like your writing. It is so unique, it's great. Keep it up!
A Healing Heart 2007-12-29 ch 6,	abuseReally cool! Good writing!
Sara Frisch 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abuseFirst of all, your story has great potential. Good work!Congratulations. Now, let's get down to buisness: 1. Grammar - some of your sentences lack appropriate grammar, especially concerning verb tense and proper use of certain plural words. Be sure to not only check each sentence individually, but examine them as a whole to make sure that they fit together. 2. Context - context is really important for any writer who wants their story to be believable to their readers. Some of your character's words and actions, as well as occurences, are - to be blunt - awkward. For instance, the character is continually involved in events and conversations that are unexpected and somewhat random, making the story a little unrealistic. By making sure that your story's events connect (relevantly!), the reader will automatically be less confused and more interested in your story. 3. Lastly, "Show, don't Tell" - Subtly, paint a picture for your reader through your characters' words and actions. This is more exciting and more likely to capture your readers' attention than simply stating details and descriptions. Aside from that, your story is wonderful. Keep writing!
ShadeOfNyx 2007-11-24 ch 2,	abuseI like this story so far... it could use a little bit of work (not a lot; it's really good), but I like it! When will you be updating?

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