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| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-08 ch 1,  | abuseThis is very good- excellent rhythm! I absolutely love the last three lines! :) --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| lovefantasyworkreality 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseIt's true that words can shatter your world, but it's also true that just not saying anything can seriously hurt someone. For a while when I was in a public school, very few people talked to me, and that hurt my spirit so much. Then, because my spirit was hurt, I started behaving badly, so much so that I asked my mom to take me back into homeschool. That was the perfect remedy. I think that if I had remained in public school, my spirit/heart could have experienced permanent damage. |
| Billie.Joelle 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseWow, very nice. I like how it starts sad but becomes a happy, hopeful poem. good job |
| Michael Kim 2007-11-19 ch 1, | abuseis it up to the reader to establish who "they" is? |
| VegasGoddess 2007-11-17 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, Dreaming Chica! So awesome! And YOU DIDN'T TELL ME you had stuff up!! That's just mean. lol. I loved it. You and Alex, you're both SUCH good poetry writers, and then there's me... who sucks. But that is okay. You're REALLY good, and I cannot wait for more! You know I love you! ♥~Grissom's Sweetheart~♥ Oh, a couple more things: just a couple errors (it's the grammer/perfectionist in me, I'm sorry!) First of all, pros and cons don't have apostrophes, I THINK. I could be wrong. Might want to ask someone who actually knows about something about grammer. And the last is you spelt share with a C. Other than that, PERFECTION! |