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| WriterXO 2008-07-10 ch 1,  | abuseFirst, of all excellent job!! I love the way you wrote this. It's perfect. And just everything about it, too. Haha. I enjoyed reading it. Def. relatable! Short, sweet and to the point. Keep writing please! |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-08 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is great! I can relate... I love the 3rd and 4th lines- you create an image perfectly! --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| Leafeus 2008-01-16 ch 1, | abuseIt is good. But try to remember that poetry does not have to rhyme. When you try to force something into a rhme scheme, it can lose some of its meaning. I read a few of your others, but I will only submit one review for now so, you definitely have an ear for flow. Most of your poems are smooth and easy to read. You definitely see and show what the world is and can be. Remember: A sharp mind is a tool and a weapon both- use it. ~Leafeus Agamemnon |
| ZengHer 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseIt's sad to see other people change into someone so different. Great poem though! |
| Christian Chick 2007-11-18 ch 1, | abuseThat was amazing! I loved the subtle ryhme (don't know how to spell that) and the intensity. The last line really pulled it all together. Great job! |
| VegasGoddess 2007-11-17 ch 1, | abuseThat was intense! But I LOVED it! It's going on my favorites! I do wonder, is this written about somone in particular? Cuz I could think of a couple people who've changed and who aren't the same that we both know... but I'm not naming names... =D It was beautiful, and hits home for me. Excellent job. Love you! ♥~Grissom's Sweetheart~♥ |