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| smile for the sunshine 2007-12-15 ch 1,  | abuseinteresting. so true. the one line "those poor unfortunate souls" reminds me of the little mermaid... (that had always been my favorite as a child.) i think that it's ashame that this is so true... why is society like this? i think if we could move beyond ourselves, jealous, self-righteous, cravings for attention, maybe our world would be... a better place. what about you? and if we were less judgemental, stopped tearing people down and wouldn't be so fake... but we live in a fallen world. we need to thank adam and eve. ah, well, nice work. it's nice to read truth. = ) a well thought out thought provoking piece. |
| perpetual questions 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuse"while the face of reality is the one who pushes you in front of the cars." I can see this meaning a few things, but... anyway, I like it. It's a very bleak view of the world, and it of course seems that way sometimes. Or more often. But I'd have to think it isn't ALWAYS that way.. or hope it isn't... |
| IdeasInTheAir 2007-11-19 ch 1, | abuseOh, dark and true! How frightening...I like it (as always) and you get upgraded another spot on the RANKING. I think you're now...Honourary Word Chooser Third Class. Yup, I think. Well, you go from second to third, so that would work.=) Good job, I like this! You always serve the world straight up for us.=) ~Danielle=) |
| doxology 2007-11-17 ch 1, | abusewow. i love the repeating first lines of each stanza. it makes it so...dark, great, and true, i guess. certainly this is a favorite. great job. peace and love ~> h.p. warble |