FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseAwwh, this poem's really sweet and I like the flow of it. Really beautiful. The only advice I would have is you could add some punctuation to this, because there are periods in only a couple places. SB, courtesy of the review marathon |
| xxInsanityxx 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseaw, i can relate, but not with a guy named josh... very good :) |
| Immune 2007-11-18 ch 1, | abuseVery good, and while I would normally offer you some criticism to help you improve your poetry, I would rather focus on the meaning of the poem. If he doesn't notice you, talk to him! Get to know him some way or another, get to know his friends, and be good friends with him. After you've been friends with him a while, he may see you the same way you see him, as from this poem you seem a highly interesting and internally beautiful person. Good luck, and remember if it doesn't work out, it may not have meant to be, but at least learn something from the experience. |
| Fan Fan 2007-11-18 ch 1, | abuseHow heartfelt that last few lines are! So genuine and innocently beautiful. Well written :) |