Reviews for Waiting on the World

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lAll.of.the.abovel 2008-05-11 ch 3,	abuseUmm.Can someone please explain to me what is going on... Is this a fanfic or what? Tyler Durton...that name sounds familiar...oh right FIGHT CLUB!! Sorry, but is his name just similar to Tyler Durden. Or is it supposed to be him. I'm really confused. Is this supposed to be a original story…?
Lindy 2008-05-07 ch 11, anon.	abuseAlright. A condensed version of my love-filled review is that... I love it. I love your story. I love Sydney. I love you. I love the world in fact. Hooray! Yes, I just had very nice cake, if that explains anything. Sorry, I was going to review the other day but something happened but here I am. Can't really remember what I was going to write so I'll just talk about random stuff. It's awesome that the story's based in NSW, it's so nice to be able to relate. Not so much to the huge penthouse, hot guys and evil ** hoes but at least I can relate to where they live! Hope Sunday comes sooner.
McScribble 2008-05-04 ch 11,	abuseBeautiful! Gorgeous! Fantastic! :) Just one review to go.
MARK In TIME 2008-05-04 ch 11,	abuseAnother good chapter. I feel like I don't give you enough feedback so i've tried to be extremely critical. It would be nice if you threw a little bait at the end to hook your reader in or give us a little something to think about and ponder. This chapter was well written, funny and enjoyable, but I won't probably remember it for anything special in your story. I suppose the key to a great chapter is dropping the occasional cliffhanger (even if it is the small one) and make every chapter worth a readers while. You have done that partially with deans 18th, but it could have been more significant. You could have started with the session with emily and then plotted her demise at the party throughout the rest of the chapter as an undercurrent issue. You also don't give away enough of Noel's emotions. Her conversations are great, but we could have a better connection with her as readers by you giving away more that what she just says to people. It could be through better describing her actions or movements so that we can pick up on the particular idiosyncrasies - just something we can connect to on more than just a 2 dimensional basis. Not that your characters are 2 dimensional, just that Noel as a lead explores others (like Tyler) greater that she discovers herself. I want to know her better that just her on the outside. I want to know what goes on in her head on a greater level. Okay that's my constructive help (well, hopefully...). I really love where you're taking this story and check my e-mail often for its next installment. I'd love a chapter with more action, more drama and more Noel/Typer moments so hopefully it will cumulate at Dean's b'day. Enjoying your story immensely, MARK In TIME P.S - write the location of deans B'day. I'd love to be able to for example drive by (insert suburb like North Bondi) and be like 'hey that's where Dean's was at!'
boredbottom 2008-05-03 ch 11,	abuseIt was very entertaining .. now im left wondeirng what will happen at the party! GREAT JOB!
theslykit 2008-05-03 ch 11,	abuseplease hurry and update!!
Bompie-Salamanca 2008-05-03 ch 11,	abuseDUDE. Jet said 'YOUR MOM'! But, Austrailian-like. I apologize for my horrible American-ness. o.O Oh, Noel. She went through a heck of a lot of trouble to make sure Tyler didn't go and accidentally off himself. Yay for Noel showing that she really cares! Ooh, and a wrist-grab! And a blush! Gah, lovely. Superheroes. Can't get much dorkier. Shall be interesting, no doubt. Lots of spandex. I'm scared for Noah though. If Emily plays him, I'm gonna cry. Well, not cry. But be sad/angry. HahaHA, she's a shrine-girl in denial! That was great. For some reason I thought of Hey Arnold, that kid's show from Nickelodeon years ago, when Helga had that shrine in the back of her closet of Arnold, made up of bubble gum and all that disgusting junk. NOEL'S A CLOSET-STALKER! Love this, Bompie-Salamanca
Operationiva 2008-05-03 ch 11,	abuseAHAHAHA! Love the part about toe-wriggling! Nice job yet again! BUT! TOO SHORT! ARG!! -grabs you by the neck- Anywhoo... Your Fanny (people are MEANT to think 'oh she's her fan' not 'oh she's her fanny!!' pervert. ^-^) Operationiva
fancyacupoftea 2008-05-03 ch 11,	abuseoh how i love your story. so witty! this is the only story that has made laugh so much. your brilliant! im looking forward to the next chapter.
Singingperson 2008-05-02 ch 11,	abuseI thought it was lovely! Gah, I'm really excited about the next chapter. But she got Emily to say incriminating stuff! yay! Hmm, until next time.
Bompie-Salamanca 2008-04-21 ch 10,	abuseOh, she knows she doesn't need proof. It's engrained on her mind how much she wants him. :] Haha, good update. It's nice to see how Tyler and his lil bro converse, it gives this lovely little insight into Durton's world. THAT IDIOT. Valerian? While driving? What is with that boy? I love his character and arrogance and assurance in himself that he's indestructible, but really. OH MY GOSH. You're not gonna pull a Cruel Intentions and get him hit in (instead of by) his car? Kidding. I can't find anything that's upsets me about this update, like. At all. I liked this chapter a lot, Bompie-Salamanca
Operationiva 2008-04-20 ch 10,	abuseI think I liked this chapter the best so far!! My favorite part was when Tyler picked her up into a twirl and fell. MUWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...! Your Fanny (ew...not like that! I ment Fan pervert!) ^-^ Operationiva
MARK In TIME 2008-04-20 ch 10,	abuseHiho my fellow sydneysider, So sorry about not reviewing your last chappie. I was right near the end of my review when my Mac decides to die on me. The sook spent a week on the sidelines and I suffered through days of withdrawn symptoms including babbling incessantly about losing my greatest friend and watching tv like it was my life force. Anyway, by the time I got the Mac back I felt the next chappie would come soon and...here it is! I really adore this story. Noel is very likable and easy to connect to. It was nice having a chapter on her family situation then a chappie with the Durtons - keeps readers interested and maintains the development of the plot and sub plot. I'm still just as surprised you haven't got so many more reviews. It can't be your summary that is letting you down because that's what drew me in. It was not the regular '(Insert name) is a sarcastic, smart, tomboy that lives in some broken home. As if life isn't difficult enough, she has to deal with a arrogant, popular and sexy jerk who just won't leave her alone! R and R!! I suck at sumaries(intentionally spelt wrong by me) !' Your summary is interesting and implies a well written author (which you are). I also want to say I LOVE the Aussie references! Keep it up. In my review that I was trying to write and then got wiped (bloody laptop), I remember saying the refs were well placed and I particularly like the Love song dedication one. Looking forward to the next chapter and LOVING what's already there, MARK In TIME P.S - A little bit of nitpicking but, it it the pursuit of 'happiness' not 'happyness'. You must of missed that one.
One-Hand Clap 2008-04-20 ch 10,	abuseAlthough I loved this chapter for the general hijinks employed by Noel, Timmy and Tyler (they made me laugh! and the polaroid of Durton half smiling is so sweet!), but I have to say I wasn't mad about how short it was! Please make the next one longer! - Clap Trap, Review Marathon
Bompie-Salamanca 2008-04-03 ch 9,	abuseThe card George wrote. That made me laugh so hard. :] Oh, my, her MOTHER. She's gonna make me so angry, I can just tell. "OH, I'm in New York, but everything's just peachy!" And that's exactly what people would do, too. I like how realistic the characters are. But I love Durton's realistic extravagance. He just makes me happy no matter what you do, honestly. He could go and marry Emily and I'd still love him. But it would make me cry. :[ And her father. He seems like one of those people that don't care, but when they try to [or pretend to] they end up just trying too hard and it makes everyone even more annoyed with them. Now I wanna know more about their family relationship! I wasn't too interested in her mother running away and why her father is barely there, but now I'm totally into it. Great chapter, i heart x iqbal

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