Reviews for Curse of Vermillion

Reviews For: Curse of Vermillion

Ranoko 2008-06-22 ch 23,	abuseFINALLY! Robert begins to awaken! facepalm Yes, I know it's for the sake of the story and in his character to be so blind, but that doesn't mean he doesn't get on nerves. -.-# And the trio were fairly good in their capture! Just... not quite the escaping part... Though, really, what good will isolating Morgana do? She doesn't necessarily have to eat or drink, and her body parts are removable. ..Though, not sure what the removable part has to do with anything... shrugs Ah well; it popped into my mind. ...As did a random security camera watching her in the dungeon. O.o Not that it'd record much of interest(if it could exist), but popped up anyway. She could annoy the camera-watcher-person! XD heheh; I'll stop my blabbering now~ ^-^ Still enjoying it immensly! ^w^ Ja~
Ranoko 2008-04-14 ch 20,	abuseI love your songs!! X3 I can hear the beat, the rhythm, coursing through my mind and body. I want hear it out loud, but within me it still burns and urges me to dance! To weave in time and go mad with joy! I dare not merely sit still but move my body along, let it take me on a wild turn and revel in the ecstasy while it lasts. Perhaps it's my love of music that helps move me so, but you are absolutely wonderful with your lyrics and storyline~ ^w^ Anyway, I am really enjoying how you're taking your story so far; and it's progressing nicely.(I'm sure I've said it before, but it's true!) I love how the characters are changing as time continues and how everything fits so nicely. I'll continue to wait to read; even if that's longer than I intend. ^-^' Ja~
Ranoko 2008-01-12 ch 12,	abuseThe title somewhat argues a bit with the end of the chapter, no? X3 Anyway, sounds like aquaintences are moving along nicely. ^-^ And Jacobs may be seeing his friends again sooner than he thinks. That is, if he doesn't go the opposite way looking for them. XD' And then there's the question of how Robert and the girls will react to Jacobs' new friends... Gives lots to think about! ^-^ Lookin' forward to reading more. Ja~
Ranoko 2007-12-24 ch 11,	abuseI'm rather enjoying this so far. X3 I really like how you're going speed-wise with this, as I'm sure I've said before. The relation between the characters is growing very nicely as well. ^-^ Loving it, as always. Ja~
Ranoko 2007-12-07 ch 8,	abuseAh, I love dancing in the night. ^-^ But I'm always the one who trips over my own feet and almost falls to the ground. ^-^' So can't really do it that often... Nice 'intro' to how Morgana's fitting in with the curse of the queen, her relationship with how she's taking it. Loving it. Ja~
Ranoko 2007-11-25 ch 6,	abuse...First thing that comes to mind when I read about homemade explosives; 'Yay! Sounds like fun! X3' XD Really enjoying this so far, as I always do! ^-^ You've got a good flow going and the characters aren't all compiling too fast. Lets the reader get a hold of who's who before getting thrown another spin. X3 Can't wait to read more! Ja~
awilla the hun 2007-11-22 ch 2,	abuseDespite an open and frank snobbery based around manga (possibly due to reports about battle royale. My god, but what kind of man gets up one morning and decides to write about 42 children killing each other?) this turns out to be a good story. It is interesting to have a look through the eyes of the evil monster for once. It shows our very different perceptions of each other. (one man's terrorist...) Keep going! And I would like some reviews in return. Sorry for the blatant self advertising.
Lavender-Lunaria 2007-11-19 ch 3,	abuseVery Interesting idea! So far the tempo is very well set! That's a problem I have, so I already admire you! The main problem I see is that when you shift from scene to scene, the character focus is unspecified. I got a bit confused as to who we were following initially. It gets cleared up eventually, but you might want to watch that. Also, the scene-changes feel a bit abrupt at times as well. One more thing I noticed is that in the last chapter, the ending scene was slightly rushed. But now I'm just getting nitpicky, and it'll probably be fine in the end. So far, I know Robert and Morgana and even Maria a lot better than Angela. But I know that's probably going to change, too! Okay, so far, I really like Robert! He seems so brave and sweet. Naturally all of the non-wiccans would be mislead. And I think that's great! It's always a plus when a story has dynamics that express cultural depth, and possesses characters who are human enough to be flawed and have flawed points of view. It gives them room to grow! I can tell that your characters are human, and thus I'm instantly fond of them, because I can empathize. I love the back story. It was very epic. And I also really like Morgana. She's a strong, likable femal protagonist. Do you know how rarely that happens??! Hahah, and I also like Meg. Can I call her Meg? She seems sweet, even if she's not an important character. oh. Not that you're doing this, but just something to watch out for, because a lot of people have this problem. Try not to introduce too many characters who you won't get to delve into. For one, its hard to manage. Also, it's okay to have supporting characters who are only seen a few times, but make sure they have a sense of depth- like they could have their own lives and stories outside the main characters. So far you've done this really well~!! Random curiosity, but what happened to the demon child of the legend?? You'll probably reveal this later, right? But I was just curious! hahahah. This story is VERY in depth and well written! I can tell that you've put a lot of thought into it! so far the characters are intriguing and 3D so this is a really great start! Keep up the great work! = D

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