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VegasGoddess 2007-11-26 ch 1,	abuseI think I know who this is about. That is, IF this is about somebody. lol. Anyway, you know how much I love you, and if someone is manipulating you like this, I'll have their ** hanging from a tree faster than you can say, "So-and-so is manipulating me." That's a promise. Excellent work, by the way! I thought it was very well-written and expressed your feelings greatly. Loved it! ♥~Grissom's Sweetheart~♥
Michael Kim 2007-11-22 ch 1,	abusejust a few spelling and grammatical errors "than", not "then" and "pour" not "poor" (trust me, it happens. no biggie. lol) and then i thought it was interesting how you said "do you remember/all the stories you tell?" because the present tense in the latter line hinted at a continuation of this story-telling (either that or you messed up on verb tenses) and then "you fooled them all" so... it's past-tense? what's going on? inconsistencies... now for great news.. the division in lines the breaks in your diction adds for emphasis and mood i think it's just your style, i've seen a lot of this pattern used in your other poems as well
Mikkifracture 2007-11-20 ch 1,	abuseGirl this is good. Don't ever let anybody manipulate you. Your better than that. Don't ever settle for less than the whole truth. Thanks for the review for my poem. I'm glad you liked it.