|Reviews for Salt And Chocolate|
| I be a poet lost in morbidity 7/27/09 . chapter 1
I like the descriptions in this, but it's not my favorite of yours. I didn't like the way you sort of made it really really plain what the speaker wants, and how much they want it. It takes away from the effect of the poem. I did like the way you only had exclamation marks and no other punctuation, It gives a note of urgency to the lines.
| FaithMemory 6/4/09 . chapter 1
wow LOL, this is really good, I like how you truly want salt and chocolate. The emotion is really obvious. I like how you used deep words like 'thee' in a simple poem like this cause it sounds like 'formal'. I enjoyed reading this actually, made me smile because right now I'm starving. XD