Hi again!
Let's begin with the beginning: I love the Shakespeare quote, Richard I, isn't it? Though the contrast with the next line is a bit too strong, there's no connection between the two really. Generally, the first few lines are a bit too trivial and clichéd. Ok, that might have been done on purpose, but as a reader, you just skim over those lines without really getting anything out of it.
I'll ignore the turn to the gutter...
I definitely prefer the second half of the poem - especially the two lines "Making him yearn for more / I restrain from speaking". Was the clever congruence of vowel sounds deliberate? The sudden appearance of an "I" is also very effective - the poem gains a whole new dimension at this point.
I love the imagery in the last line, but it doesn't really fit in with the rest of the poem, so it sounds very awkward and out of place - shame, but that's what happens!
Hope this was kind of helpful!

lol @ your a/n... bunch of students together, it's bound to happen! this one is actually quite quirky and amusing.