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Reviews For: Creative Writing Class Poem 5
Hannah 2007-11-25 . chapter 1
One more review to go!
What I didn't like in this poem was the sudden change of tense between "twas the morning of Thanksgiving" and "I'm waiting for the time to eat". It just destroys any kind of consistency right from the beginning. I'm also not sure if it was a good idea to repeat the word "wait" in the third line - surely you could have introduced a new idea here instead of just rewording the line before?
On the contrary, I really like that the next line takes up the word "stuffed", while also referring back to Thanksgiving.
Towards the end, it's hilarious to read how Daffy is accused of the heinous crime of "pretending to be something he's not". I love the transition from triviality to seriousness here!
On the whole, this is probably the poem I liked best out of all five, because it actually makes sense (in itself) while being full of Oscar-Wilde-like randomness! Well done!
BrokenPots 2007-11-20 . chapter 1
This was a laugh lol. It's nice and innocent at first, but then it transforms into something deeper. I'm guessing that you said "Though it was Daffy, not Bugs"
Seira Hakami 2007-11-20 . chapter 1
I agree, well done.
Smoky Bear 2007-11-20 . chapter 1
lol, this one was very enjoyable. great work.
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