Grabbles isn't a word. Grapples is. But I think grab is a good enough word for that 2nd to last line.

I think that the lines where he is talking would be more powerful and more noticeable if you had them in quotes, as if it were actually him talking.

Also the ...'s kind of take away from the story, as if you're trying to make it super dramatic. It's dramatic enough on its own, haha.

Interesting little story. It's like a small flash at a world... I don't think that her killing him makes any sense, however. She's willing to be raped every night to keep her job... but... she's going to risk that job by killing him? It doesn't make any sense. Maybe if the sense of her helplessness and despair was more evident - the crazed feeling that led her to think this was the only way... if THAT were evident, then it would make more sense. But it wasn't, so it's like... what?

-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (link in my profile)

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Loved it. :D
Loved it, in all its sickening unfairness of life and being a woman and all that, but EW! You portray the grossness of being ...uh, 'fondled'... by someone to whom you must obey but who you hate, really well. I can't say this is your best one-shot, though it's deliciously short and electrifying, I think you could've done infinitely better even if it IS well written. :) Hey, this is the person who knows your style better than you yourself know it who's talkin', so you'd better listen. *puffs out chest*
:) Oh! And, just for the record, I absolutely LOVED this:

"Due to plagarism scares, I have removed the following pieces: Petite Rouge, Das Rattenfanger von Hameln and My Husband's Whore. Sorry for the inconvenience."

That made me virtually laugh my buttocks off. Hehehe, but "My Husband's Whore" was so cool! Aw, man... I really liked that piece. Dang. Now I'm gonna have to think up of my own 'dirty couple situations'. *growls in feigned discontent*
AH! no way! I've already used up today's spare time, but I promise you that tomorrow and every day starting from today I'll have at least an hour to dedicate to you and/or writing, so you can expect to see me around more often :D I hope I'll see more of your lovely little person skulking around on these sites! Write to me soon, yeah? I can't STAND these week-long absences of life signs from both of us. Honestly!
So bite me, I can't even finish your "Thou Shalt" candies. Ah well. I'll have something to look forward to tomorrow :D
See you! Hear from you soon I hope! *whimpers for attention*

Much, much love,
-Sei
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Very mysterious. I love your epilogues- they do everything they're suppose dto do- keep the reader intrigued.

I really like the way how you don't make the reader feel stupid- all the unnecessary stuff isn't there. No unnecessary details, words, suggestions...

Really good :)

Thanks,

-Iris