I love this! So much emotion and I love the description. I love the bit about the eyes matching the color of the sky, that was so beautiful and wonderfully written.

I would love honest opinions/feedback from a writer like you! It would mean the world to me and I would appreciate it.

I like the emotions in this. However, considering you didn't punctuate the capitals, I'm assuming you want this to flow. Then I suggest not punctuating, or at least not putting in full stops or other sentence-stopping marks. And also, you put the past tense in brackets - I think it's inconsistent how it is done in some places and not others, although they do stand out. That's up to you though.

Happy writing!

So gracefully sad and honest, and many beautiful lines. Really nice work.

I love this. Beautifully written. Do I need to say anything more?

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Wow, that was really sad. But it was so packed full of emotion, it just was wonderful. I loved the imagery andf feelings the flowed out of this poem. Great job.