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| Fiction Luver 2007-11-24 ch 3,   | hehe, nice. but just for the record, I told you in my other reviews that when a new preson speaks, start a danged new line ffs! Hope that helps! GOOD LUCK, try giving more detail, you should write heaps more, but im guessing you're going to write heaps in the plot and now is just the begining right? ANYWAY, yours sincerely FIciton Luver |
| Fiction Luver 2007-11-21 ch 2, | luv ur descriptions, but don't you think it's a bit short for a chappie? Great work anyway. Hope you take my advice, your kind reviewer Fiction Luver |