not bad...I could see this being filled out and turned into a full length story...but it's nice just the way it is :)

Good one. Well written, and I like it as a one-shot. I don't think there's much more that you could do with it.

Very interesting, and very well written. I think that this could make a very engrossing full length story. It also reads well alone. Great work, I really like this. Keep writing.

And also, I updated The Ebony Affair, although it's now under the title Venomous Design. It's the same story, nothing has changed. I just finally found the right words for an adequate summary and title.