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| Yellow Duvet 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseAnd yet again you have amazed me. :D |
| Kicking Poe 2007-12-22 ch 1, | abusefragmented, as you said, but the discontinuity works wonderfully - true to life and love, with moments flickering across our eyelids (if that makes sense). I like the dental floss image. cheers. |
| painted.music 2007-11-23 ch 1, | abusekonnichi wa "But she's just in love with love" is an excellent line. Profound. :) A great way to tie up the poem. Favorite stanza: "Because she goes through boys like dental floss / (And she cleans her teeth / Religiously)" It was absolutely, stunningly amazing! Awesome imagery. So so cool. I really liked this poem (especially that part). Zaijen -Shan- |
| kelsi bones 2007-11-22 ch 1, | abuseI really like this piece. It seems like a story in verse rather than just a poem. The last section is my very favorite: Oh he is so in love/With her but she's/Just in love with love Sometimes I think that that's how I am: just in love with love. That thought scares me a bit. k.X *adds to favorite stories |