Reviews for Animal Spirits - FictionPress.com

HGiel 2008-02-10 ch 1,	This is cute! I like Mia, she seems kind of geeky ^^
TimeTraveler4 2007-11-27 ch 1,	Sweet Miza! I'm not sure if you want to or not but i'm not sure if you need a disclaimer for the zoo or something... I;m actually surprised because someone beat me to revieing you! I'm very disappointed! lol anyway good job... me proud! I'm in PAT right now... lol
Nemonus 2007-11-22 ch 1,	Nice beginning. The action scene and the mention of "claws" make me want to read further. The narrator's description of herself is stiff. Make sure she only tells the reader what they need to know; is the name of her high school essential to mention at that moment? Said moment is an infodump. You could weave descriptions of things such as her physical appearance into the narrative. The descripton of the house is good, but it would be nice if you put everything which is in present tense together, and everything in past together. Not bad. Your prose is smooth, if not entirely polished (the flat-out descriptions could be, as I said before, worked into the narrative. I'll watch this fic to see where it goes.