Reviews for Heroes of an Ended World

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Berserko 2008-04-08 ch 2,	A good start. But it would have been better to introduce the characters a little more early on in the story, so you at least get a feel for the kind of people they are. Also, the story lacks some description. It doesn't always require that you are vivid and detailed with it, but there's a line before things get vague and plain. More of a description would be good.
Berserko 2008-04-08 ch 1,	First off, let me say that the title itself it awesome. It was good enough to make me want to read all of this. I won't be able to right now because I'm at school currently, but I will once I get home. A good way to start off a story. Give a perspective of someone who saw the main event firsthand and then begin. It's a good premise, and other than a few spelling and grammatical errors, it's a damn good story so far.
helixdown 2008-02-15 ch 17,	superpowers? He has no superpowers, the ginetic implants are just increasing his adrenaline output. Your stories aren't bad! They just are in a "dirty" environment, (AKA strip club from 3) where it hard to turn it into a romantic, emotional, emo crap story like mine. Also, if you want advice, here's what i say, listen to music when your writing, and if you know your gonna be writing about a fight, listen to hardcore music! It really helps! Oh, also, if you do happen to want to make it more emo, then just make sure to put in chapters in between that consist mainly of dialogue or arguments rather than fights, it makes the story seem less shoot-shoot,kick the crap outta him. Not that there's anything wrong with those, i'm just saying if you wanted to. As for the ideas, you'll have to call me cuz i tried sending this message thouasands of times and im tired of retyping them oh, sorry for posting this as a review, but the site wouldn't let me PM you for some reason
helixdown 2008-01-16 ch 20,	NO! This cant be the end! NO! LOL, i was listening to blink 182 when i was reading this, with that one song,"down" and right when Jak died it went "this can't be the end" pretty weird coincidence, but it made THAT much of a difference, well, it was a good story, though they basically accomplished nothing, that sux. Lol, so what story are you doing next? Oh, and sorry, i'll update, probably somewhere between Thursday and Saturday, and I MEAN IT, because: 1.) I wanna get to the more exciting part 2.) I wanna make my next story, not soulkeeper, its one that i got an idea about from, well, i cant tell you publicly someones gonna steal it, i'll PM you. (yes, i'm that paranoid) 3.) After that story i REALLY wanna get to Soulkeeper cuz one, thats my best story, and also because Fugitive is after that, and I REALLY wanna do that cuz it so must awesomer then soulkeeper, which is AMAZING for me, lol, yes, it IS possible to become obsessed with your own stories.
helixdown 2008-01-11 ch 19,	Short, but hey, so was mine. Liked it, though Lussa is really annoying. Oh, and no, Mike isn't Jena's boyfriend, thats demitri, Mike is the drummer dude.
helixdown 2008-01-08 ch 18,	I like the last part, very dramatic. I'm sorry I haven't updated in a while, school is hard work and I'm working on my own manga currently, (as in the comic book kind) so I'm very busy, well I hope it turns out well. WOW thats alot of ideas, I think they're all pretty awesome, I always thought of a story about a shooting, but i could never could find a good storyline for it, well good luck. I like all of them but the one about the jews, well not BECAUSE of that, but I don't understand it, either the email got chopped up or their were just too many mistakes, but all there was on it that I could read was, "Babies with guns, nuke australia."
helixdown 2008-01-04 ch 16,	Alas! Another update! Well, i can't really talk, i haven't updated much either, or, well, at all. Well, merry christmas and a hapy new year! Oh, hmm, i don't know. I want to stop road to hell, like, permamently. I know i've done it alot, but I've just been searching for the right things to write, and now i think i know what im gonna stick with, but I think I'm gonna do one story at a time so i can finish them faster, update more often, and not favor one over the over so i don't update one too much and leave the other behind. So here's what I'm saying, i delete road to hell, continue caged bird until its finished, then move onto another story, then onto the soulkeeper saga. Any words?
helixdown 2007-12-16 ch 15,	THEY ALL DIE! HOORAY! MUAHAhAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I BURNED YOUR JOURNAL! MuaHaHAHhdauHAhHAhaHah. Meh.
helixdown 2007-12-09 ch 13,	Good, but I think you killed off too many people in one chapter
helixdown 2007-12-08 ch 12,	Good, is there going to be some way to win? Or all they all just gonna die horrible, gruesome deaths?
Dark Elegance10 2007-12-08 ch 1,	Nice. I like this kind of story! I'll be reading this.
helixdown 2007-12-06 ch 11,	Ew, he just used his friends intestines? Okay, gaia? Gaia gaia gaia, you mean one of those weird characters on If so, then yes, but I don't use it cuz I have no idea how to or what it realy is, so i gave up on it.
helixdown 2007-12-06 ch 10,	Your not screwing it up, its getting better! Way better! I love this view of hell, you make it completely unique compared to how most people think of it, hell is like burning, barren forest, where demons are but wild creatures hunting and fighting for dominance, I love it! Ahem, good work, update soon.
helixdown 2007-12-06 ch 9,	OMG, my computers been acting up and I can't get it to update, luckily i finally did, so I'll be updating soon-ish, well, maybe not this week, because I have to go to a party, and a party next week, but I should be able to squeeze some in between. nice chapter, I never knew blood virus's worked like that, and i love the first part "it's not like some stupid kid made this story up, its real life." Lol, you are one stupid kid. Oops, did i say that out loud? Man, i though you were dead or something, where've you been? I called you, sent you emails, and you hadn't replied, answered, or updated so I was like, OH GOD, HE GOT RAPED BY A GIANT CHEESE MONSTER!
helixdown 2007-11-27 ch 8,	Good, but i'm confused, who was in the cars? The order, or the demons? And i've got a question, please reply, how should i do my story, all 1st person, or some 1st person some 3rd person as the appropiate times?

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