 aussiegrl5070 2007-12-07 . chapter 2You're story is fulling in nicely. You have nice grammar and I haven't seen any spelling errors. All in all the content is good. You say you don't have a plot, but I can see one forming. Your main character, Keri, is running because being an Eklundress is bad. She doesn't want to hurt Christopher but has not choice.
Some things to consider: are you having the romance be between Keri and Joe or Keri and Christopher. Is Christopher and his family the ones who don't approve of Eklundress's? Are you planning to have people come after her? Is there going to be a battle between the Eklundress' and the norms (non magick beings).
I've really enjoyed reading what you have so far. I hope you update soon. Have a nice winter holiday. |
 hokeypokeysmile 2007-11-26 . chapter 1Mm I like it. It's not the kind of story I'd normally read (I'm more of a realistic fiction-y person), but I really like the writing itself. The descriptions are really effective, but yeah it's kind of hard to see where the story's going.
For more "different" names, I like Bronwyn, Scarlett, Ivy, Ash, and Jeniah, but it all really depends on how you want your character to be portrayed.
Good luck... |